Sunday, September 14, 2014

There Goes the Neighborhood

From the view of a Native American:

1492
   Who are these people? They are so different, so strange. They come from other land? Not possible...but...? Hm.. What if men from the sea were sent from powerful force, one we can't understand? They bring us goods for our shinies, much of which we have an abundance of.
   These men, they are as white as the sun, and wear strange, foreign clothes we have never seen before. These men are strange and speak this language much more proficient than us, but they have spent so much time into teaching us this new language of theirs. Maybe they are a message from a higher power?
                                                                   
Spring, 1493
   These newcomers (although not so new anymore) had finally left, but not before taking so much from us! They took my family, our crops, and even almost destroyed our food source. They say they will return soon, and left some with us. They introduce us to a new weapon called the "musket" and a horse, which helped us actually have a fighting chance against these who had taken out families and took our land from us.

Fall, 1493
   The foreigners had returned finally, but came back to the crew they left behind, dead. The captain had gone onto a rampage, slaughtering hundreds of us. We were down to a mere hundred left, and many of our crops were destroyed in the fight. After all this had happened, he brought a couple of us with him, sticking all of us on a ship, in a crammed room with little to no light and ventilation. I wonder what he has done to our land, and what will he do with us?

3 comments:

  1. I am confused, it seems like your Native American is writing a journal about the events that occurred, but the Native Americans did not know how to write. So is this a person portraying the thoughts what a Native American may have said?

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  2. I like how you tell the story from the perspective of the Native Americans as if the speaker was recording his thoughts. Your use of known history in the passages adds a more realistic feeling to it as if the reader can feel the pain that the speaker is feeling. Both physical and mental pain. However, a little more descriptive words and verbs would have made this even better.

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    1. Great. I will change that as soon as I have time...which is probably going to be never.

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